Concentration,
Fixation
The radiant
thick strands of glamorized hair
Splayed across
delicate innocent shoulders
Of the
transparent, translucent skin
Exposing weak
bones said to be beautiful
Blue, green,
yellow and pink gowns
Shape the
squeezed waists
Accentuates the
voluptuous aspects
Of an unreal
unnatural being
Lengthy lean
limbs,
The towering
heights, the symmetry
Makes ourselves
incomparable or defected
The only one
recognizable and yet
Fatal flaw of
these creatures
Seems to be
their desperation
For a male or
the lack there of
Now this
infiltrates minds,
Infiltrated my
young mind
Distorting my
creativity…
My perception of
what I may deem beautiful
Replacing it
with society views
Or unworthy and
unwarranted opinions on such topic
I now depict and
question why ever since my sweet 16
I fixate on
images that aren’t real
rather impossible to achieve
spiraling me out
of control
and can’t help
but notice how ironically,
my opinion of
beautiful aligns with Disney Princesses
Wow! Sarah, the opening two stanzas about the Disney princesses push into new descriptive territory for you. You focus on the details that show w/o telling. Then the shift happens, but it's not quite clear where. "Ourselves" seems the start, but really it feels like the 3rd stanza? And then the tone shifts. In part, you begin this w/ a third person description 'infiltrates young minds' that doesn't suggest your own, but then you acknowledge the more personal aspect. Clarifying and 'showing' more in the 2nd half might focus this poem. A fine start!
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